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What exactly does "functions" (for the section heading) mean?

I was going for what the tower is used for. Its purpose or fuction. I couldn't really think of a more appropriate heading. Any suggestins? --Torsodog^Talk

Actually, I think that the "FootTown" and "Observation decks" could go under their own section, maybe titled "Attractions" or similarly. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 11:41, 22 February 2009 (UTC)

Added an "attractions" subheading that encompasses both the foottown and observatory sections. --Torsodog^Talk 15:05, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

The first area tourists must visit upon reaching the tower is FootTown, a 4-story building stationed directly under the tower. Here, visitors can eat, shop and visit several museums and galleries. Elevators that depart from the first floor of FootTown can be used to reach the first of two observations decks, the 2-story Main Observatory. For the price of another ticket, visitors can again board another set of elevators that depart from the second floor of the Main Observatory in order to reach the final observation deck—the Special Observatory.

This whole part here needs a ref.

Added some refs. --Torsodog^Talk 19:24, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Also, what makes this a reliable source?

I'm not really sure. I could maybe find some other refs. I found some stuff on TVtropes.com, would that be considered reliable? --Torsodog^Talk 19:24, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

TVtropes.com is a search engine, and by itself is nothing; I'll have to see the individual refs. Also, current ref 14 has an error that should be fixed. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 11:41, 22 February 2009 (UTC)

Noble Story (talk • contributions) 07:54, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

I added 3 refs, and I believe all of them are reliable. Check them out! --Torsodog^Talk 17:21, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

One more ref: What makes this a reliable source? Is it needed? Maybe you could replace it with something else, or remove it? Noble Story (talk • contributions) 01:12, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

I don't really know much about anime or anime sites, but I poked around wikipedia and noticed that Anime News Network is used in some featured content such as List of Naruto characters, so I assumed it was considered reliable. Is this a safe assumption? --Torsodog^Talk 15:18, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

Review Part 2

OK, WP:PLAGIARISM defines plagiarism as "the taking of someone else's work and passing it off as one's own, whether verbatim or with only minimal changes." (emphasis mine) I think several parts of this article are have "only minimal changes" from the original source. They need to be not just reworded, but their entire structure changed. These are (with the original beside it):

The need for a large broadcasting tower in the Kantō region occurred when NHK, Japan's public broadcasting station, started television broadcasting in 1953. After NHK built its own transmission tower and other privately run broadcasting companies started operations in the following months, the government believed that Tokyo would become cluttered with transmission towers.

"The need for such a lofty tower began with the establishment of Nippon Hoso Kyokai, Japan's national broadcasting station, in 1953. NHK had built its own transmission tower, and when other privately run broadcasting companies started operations in the months that followed, the government feared the metropolis would become cluttered with transmission towers."

The Takenaka Corporation first broke ground in June 1957, and hundreds of tobi, traditional Japanese high-rise construction workers, came to Tokyo from all over the country to work on the new tower. Each day more than 400 laborers worked on-site.

"Hundreds of tobi, Japan's traditional construction workers on high buildings, came to Tokyo from all over the country to work on the new landmark, and each day more than 400 laborers worked on site, said Yokoyama."

I reworded both of these section, I believe, sufficiently. Let me know what you think. --Torsodog^Talk 15:03, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

Also, this apart needs a ref: Tokyo Tower has two observation decks—the Main Observatory and the Special Observatory; both offer a 360 degree view of Tokyo and, on clear days, Mount Fuji can be seen to the south. Unlike the Eiffel Tower, neither observation deck at Tokyo Tower is located near the absolute top of the structure.

I added a ref for the 360 and Mt Fuji facts, but removed the other portion as I decided it is relatively unnecessary. I figure readers can do the math pretty easily and do not need it pointed out to them. --Torsodog^Talk 15:03, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

And, according to the linkchecker, you have a dead link which needs to be replaced.

Replaced! --Torsodog^Talk 15:03, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

Noble Story (talk • contributions) 01:16, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

Well, this article now looks OK. Noble Story (talk • contributions) 08:59, 26 February 2009 (UTC)