Wikipedia:Featured article review/Lottie Dod/archive1

Messages left at Jeronimo, Bio, and Olympics. Sandy (Talk) 16:52, 24 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Article has very few references, almost no inline citations, and outdated image tags. Judgesurreal777 02:51, 24 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment WP:LAYOUT is all goofed up, with See also at the bottom, but including external links. All-round cleanup needed, in addition to citations. Sandy (Talk) 03:11, 25 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Fails 1a. Here are random examples of why the whole text needs serious copy-editing.
- "She won the Wimbledon Championships five times, the first when she was only fifteen, in the summer of 1887." She won it five times in the summer of 1887? That's what it says. Remove one comma.
Second para starts: "In addition to tennis, Dod competed in many other sports, including golf, field hockey, and archery. In addition to other ..."—Clumsy repetitions.
Why is "cotton" linked? Do we, or do we not, speak English? Why are the simple years linked? They tell me absolutely nothing relevant to the article, and should be delinked.
"The two would meet again ..."—Journalistic use of the conditional; plain past tense, please ("met").
"Although designated as a so-called "open" tournament,"—We don't need both "designated" and "so-called".
"The Wimbledon final of 1888 was rematch of the previous year"—"a"?

Tony 11:39, 29 October 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment Lacks inline citations (1. c. violation). LuciferMorgan 23:41, 5 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Suggested FA criteria concerns are lack of references (1c) and images (3). Marskell 10:40, 10 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Remove One edit since nom, no improvement in issues raised during FAR. Sandy (Talk) 23:43, 19 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Remove as per Sandy. Tony 08:23, 20 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]
Remove as above. --RelHistBuff 10:03, 24 November 2006 (UTC)[reply]