Wikipedia:Peer review/2008 Spanish Grand Prix/archive1
2008 Spanish Grand Prix[edit]
- A script has been used to generate a semi-automated review of the article for issues relating to grammar and house style; it can be found on the automated peer review page for April 2009.
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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to make sure it's in GA shape. I hope you enjoy reviewing it as much as I enjoy answering. Cookies all round. Apterygial 11:36, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
- Peer Review by Darth Newdar (talk)
Won't catch everything, but here's a few things I spotted:
Lead
- Why are you using references at the top of the infobox? Not that it is particulary wrong, just that it's not used on the other articles that the project is doing.
- In the lead, the information about the World Championships' situation after the race is ordered with the Constructors' Championship first, and the Drivers' Championship second. On the rest of the articles, it is the other way round.
Practice and Qualifying
- "At one of the test sessions, Hamilton was subjected to racist taunting by some of the spectators." This could do with a ref.
- "The Ferraris were fastest in the first session; Räikkönen was quickest with a time of 1:20.649, ahead of Massa, who recovered from a spin and a track excursion on his first two laps to take second." The bit I've put in bold I don't get; do you mean an off-track excursion?
- "Räikkönen clinched the first pole position of his career with a time of 1:21.813." Was it really? Surely he had a pole before that in his career? Anyway, the current ref doesn't state this, so a ref saying would be good.
Race
- "The race restarted on lap four when the safety car peeled off, Räikkönen quickly increased his lead over Massa to more than a second." This doesn't make much sense as a sentence.
Post-race
- 'Although Ferrari had performed well, their speed was not significantly better than their opponents, so "we need to keep working like crazy in the factory to improve the car in every area."' In this sentence it's not obvious who said the quote.
Hope this helps. Darth Newdar (talk) 12:58, 17 April 2009 (UTC)